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Post  Requiem on Thu Nov 18, 2010 12:38 pm

My most recent poem, I got the inspiration from a few things, the greatest being the song The Islander by Nightwish


The Lighthouse King


Ever still, the emptiness fills,
The King sits upon his throne,
And in his loss he fears the cost,
And so remains alone.

The sea crashes heavily,
Against his tower of stone,
Shining light throughout the night,
Like he, it stands alone.

He dreams of her, and times that were,
But knows that they are gone.
What he would give, if he could live
A life lived not alone.

The king walks the towers steps,
From where the light is shone,
His gaze to the sea, and where it could be,
No more he'll be alone...

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Post  JGH27 on Mon Jan 03, 2011 2:23 am

The Bottom of the Bottle

A kiss to bring in the New Year
Would fill my heart with cheer
Instead I find myself at the mercy of a bottle
Forcing my life to pass me by at full throttle

Dreading what is to come
I reach out for the rum
For it's with booze that help me cope
When I have lost all hope

I wish for no sympathy
For I am the cause of my misery
But hear me out before you judge
I hold no hate and bare no grudge

I have wasted my life away
By way of the bottle and my refusal to pay
Why is it that I should live
When I have nothing left to give

My youth a distant memory
Like a long forgotten story
Replaced with only empty pages
I've gone and wasted the last of my wages

So here I stand alone at last
Wishing that I could change my past
To have given it my everything
Would've made me feel like a king

But alas I have so failed
That my own cross I have nailed
And as I waste away my last gasps of air
I only wish I had someone that would care

Now will the Reaper come
To collect his latest victim
I close my eyes and begin to feel numb
My soul from this world has finally gone

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Re: Poetry Thread

Post  SnakeInABox on Mon Jan 03, 2011 2:25 am

Did you write that? That is bloody brilliant, I think.


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Post  JGH27 on Mon Jan 03, 2011 2:33 am

Yes I did. Any poems I've posted I've written.

You actually think it's good?

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Post  SnakeInABox on Mon Jan 03, 2011 2:08 pm

Fuck year I did. I like to read things aloud, and it caught me off guard in a bad way at first because it didnt flow, beat wise. Then after really thinking about the words of the poem, the lack of rhythm in the beggining made the whole thing more beautiful and artistic. Good job, J.

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Post  Warchamp7 on Mon Jan 03, 2011 2:55 pm

If the awkward rhythm is intended then it's quite good

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Post  Quaetam on Mon Jan 03, 2011 3:58 pm

I thought it was really good, J. Very deep.

Here's one of my own. It doesn't have a title, I wrote it in like an hour and a half last night for my AP English Lit class. It's a villanelle, which demands strict structure (ABA, ABA, ABA, ABA, ABA, ABAA rhyme scheme, two couplet lines from which the entire poem is connected, 6 stanzas), and it's a rough copy right now and I'm sure I could make it better, but anyways:

The onward path is mine to take,
No hand is dealt from which I play,
There is no fate but what I make.

In every move to lay my stake,
No die to cast nor card to lay,
The onward path is mine to take.

The chains upon my mind I break,
No shining hand doth force my way,
There is no fate but what I make.

I venture forth for my own sake,
To none do I ascribe today,
The onward path is mine to take.

For nevermore shall my soul ache,
Let no fine writ forecast my say
There is no fate but what I make.

These binding shackles I forsake,
For come the dawning of the day
The onward path is mine to take:
There is no fate but what I make.

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Post  SnakeInABox on Mon Jan 03, 2011 4:27 pm

Wow Q that sucked.

You are the worst writer EVAR.

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Post  JGH27 on Mon Jan 03, 2011 9:31 pm

I wrote it in 15-20 minutes and just wrote what came to mind. I never wrte with a structure in mind (except once)

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Post  JGH27 on Tue Jan 11, 2011 12:43 am

5 minute poem


Farewell

The piano plays a sad song
reminding me of all that I've done wrong
While I sit here in my tears
remembering the good times of yester-years

The memories of the times we had
once brought me joy, but now only make me sad
in my dreams you'll always remain
forever subjecting me to this pain

There's no denying there was a spark
but then you went and left me in the dark
now I'm alone, lost and confused
Wasting away my life with cheap booze

Not a day goes by where I don't think of you
and everything that we had planned to do
but now God has bid you come
and I have come undone

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Post  TD260 on Tue Jan 11, 2011 1:55 pm

For six weeks my hands
Will smell like metal and grease
Robotics is here.

Working into night,
Stuff to do after leaving.
My time is used up.


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Post  Warchamp7 on Mon Feb 07, 2011 2:05 pm

Recent inspiration, you can guess why

Chestnut eyes and auburn hair glow strong in dimmest light
Passions fire burns bright within revealing all in sight
And yet the darkness folds around, my heart skips twice in fright
Love is blind, my words fall deaf, I'm trapped in endless night

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Post  JGH27 on Wed Feb 09, 2011 1:48 am

Time to Say Goodbye!

When will the sun shine again
To help ease this pain I’m in
All the times I could’ve visited
Now just opportunites I have wasted

I’ll always remember your sense of humour
Every moment shared was truly a treasure
You’ve been through so many hard times
Yet you always stayed strong even when you only had 2 dimes

You were a great man
I hope you knew that I was your biggest fan
Tho you may be gone
I’ll do my best to stay strong

While every beginning has its ending
Nothing will stop this love I’ll continue sending
For you will always be my Grandpa
And I’ll never stop loving ya

By: Jeremy

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Post  Requiem on Thu Feb 10, 2011 9:48 am

I don't even know what to call this bit of broken nonsense -.-
Still, I felt like writing, and this is what I ended up with


Every world has a world of nights and darkened dreams,
Every dream has a dream where all's not what it seems.

A simple fact of life,
The mind is a mystery,
Seek out the answers,
You won't understand what you see.

Cobbled stone paths,
Or a midnight meadow.
The inner sanctuary of the soul.
Eternity in the mind of a shadow.

Every world has a world of nights and darkened dreams,
Every dream has a dream where all's not what it seems.

Forget your known truths,
Open your mind to the world.
The secrets that are hidden,
Locked away, such precious pearls.

The answers of life shall come,
When the mind has been accepted.
Truth is only a mystery
When it goes unheard and neglected.

Every world has a world of nights and darkened dreams,
Every dream has a dream where all's not what it seems.

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Post  JGH27 on Thu Feb 17, 2011 11:35 pm

Miss Me - But Let Me Go

When I come to the end of the road
And the sun has set for me
I want no rites in a gloom filled room
Why cry for a soul set free?
Miss me a little - but not too long
And not with your head bowed low
Remember the love that we once shared
Miss me - but let me go.
For this a journey that we all must take
And each must go alone
It's all a part of the Master's plan
A step on the road to home.
When you are lonely and sick at heart
Go to the friends we know
And bury your sorrows in doing good deeds
Miss me - but let me go

By: Anonymous

(This appeared in my Grandpa's leaflet today at the funeral)

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Re: Poetry Thread

Post  Dismal on Tue Mar 01, 2011 5:05 pm

A proper haiku
must speak of natures beauty
this is no haiku

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Post  JGH27 on Sun Apr 17, 2011 11:04 am

What started started as a simple verse flowed into this 10 minutes later. Is it good? I dunno, but I think it's at least decent in a sad way lol.


Conversations on a Breeze


On the verge of death
Will you take the final leap?
Willingly give up your last breath
So you no longer have to weep

Forget the past
Destroy the future
For nothing ever lasts
When you’re a moocher

In the present, you can only live
Getting by however you can
Always taking, you never give
You are a beaten man

So who should care if you live or die
When you are nothing more than a pitiful stranger
Calling the streets home, only God knows why
For surely it’s a place full of danger

And as you forget the years gone by
A lifetime of memories washed away
All because you had to get high
Regardless of the prices you pay

So as you lie there in your haze
Has it really vanquished the pain
Or is it just a temporary phase
Keeping your from becoming completely insane

You say you don’t care anymore
And yet here you stand
Still struggling to get your score
Even if it costs you your very hand

So tell me, why should we care at all
If all you want is to gain attention
For without problems, we stand tall
I should not even give you mention

But alas, said that bum
For no man is perfect, nor are they without issues
Your judgement day shall come
And I rest assure, for you I shall need no tissues

To discredit me as wasteful space
Is to believe yourself as higher worth
For I have not heard of a more ignorant disgrace
That I can honestly say, I regret your birth

For you to talk to your father as such
Makes me realise how much I’ve failed
For I should be your main support crutch
But alas that ship many years ago did sail

And as I heard my father speak
I said nothing, nor did I breathe
A single tear ran down his cheek
As the soft ground, I was put beneath



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Post  Quaetam on Sun Apr 17, 2011 9:41 pm

I've said this before and I'll say it again; I like your poetry, J. If you wanted criticism or notes on how to improve it I could offer suggestions, but frankly for a 10 minute poem, or even for any poem really, that's pretty deep. Regardless of how sad (in fact, partly because of it) I enjoy it.

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Post  JGH27 on Sun Apr 17, 2011 11:37 pm

Quaetam wrote:I've said this before and I'll say it again; I like your poetry, J. If you wanted criticism or notes on how to improve it I could offer suggestions, but frankly for a 10 minute poem, or even for any poem really, that's pretty deep. Regardless of how sad (in fact, partly because of it) I enjoy it.

I'm open to feedback, I know there's little issues with it here and there but I tend to notice afterwards. I get in a bit of a zone whenwiting these.

But ya,any advice is accepted and appreciated.

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Post  Quaetam on Fri Sep 16, 2011 3:50 pm

edited out temporarily


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Post  Requiem on Fri Sep 16, 2011 5:44 pm

Q, that is depressing as hell. Nonetheless, still amazing, and it reminded me that I had written something a while back and never shared it, so... yeah. And yeah, I know I need to work on a title other than that *Glares At It*


Funeral of Two

Hear now, that sorrowful sound of sobbing,
Such beauty should never be heard in such a way
Listen well, and hear her poor heart throbbing,
Shattered, with nothing left but sorrow and pain.

And there amid the hallowed graves of men,
The woman softly cries
With bloodstained wings encircling them
As he slowly dies.

Her tears they fall like diamond rain,
Mixing with his crimson life,
"Fate is cruel!" She cried in vain,
As he fought not to die.

The angel stood, her lover dead,
And raised her eyes to the sky
And in a voice of beauty said
"Where one, now two shall die."

Silently, the beauty weeps,
The Angel without hope,
And while her lover lies asleep
She tightly ties her rope.

Two as one with love were bound,
In joy as well as hurt.
Dead together they were found,
Now rest together in the Earth.

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Post  Quaetam on Fri Sep 16, 2011 8:28 pm

O_o. I wasn't intending to be depressing. It's a poem written from someone who questions his own ability to rise above and move on, but one who sees the need to do so.

That one, yours, was depressing, though well written. Razz

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Post  JGH27 on Sun Sep 18, 2011 11:37 pm

Those are excellent poems.

With fb's new message system I just sent my buddies fiancee a message and found a poem I sent her while she was going through a rough time. Don't think I ever posted it before.


True Love

This place you stay is no longer your home
The people inside merely strangers of a time gone by
You yearn to be set free and find the path you must roam
For only then can you finally end your cry

Your heart burns for your true love
As you begin to tire of your loneliness
You raise your head to the sky above
Praying to every God that you may feel his tenderness

A gentle whisper comes on the breeze
It’s from the very lips of the one you seek
Assuring you that your pain will ease
Silence befalls you, preventing you to speak

Days pass followed by years
Never giving up your hope
But shedding many tears
You never understand just how you cope

Then when you finally feel that all is lost
That you will never feel joy and happiness again
You’ll have paid the final cost
And again you shall find yourself with your husband

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Post  Chronicle on Mon Oct 24, 2011 4:48 pm

All right, so nobody has posted in this thread for a while but since I was directed to here from the General Art thread, I'm assuming that it's okay to post here.

This is just a little something that I put together in around fifteen minutes while listening to music track from a horror anime I watched several months ago (you might recognize the character in the video, haha).

I tend not to edit my poetry (outside of when I am actually writing it) since I feel like adding or changing anything would alter my poems radically. As such, most of my poems are unedited (or have very slight changes to them). My writing tends to be a bit darker in nature since I simply prefer to write about darker topics. They're just more interesting to me, I guess. "Darker" doesn't necessarily mean blood or violence to me, but simply pessimism. I guess the fact that I'm a bit of a pessimist doesn't help.

Anyway, like I said, here's a little something I wrote in fifteen minutes. It's currently untitled.


Cold, clear drops
Pad against the ancient window.
I’m looking for you, you know.
Every day, at all times.
Cool fingers brush the splintered wood
That has slowly rotten away with time.
It’s been years since I’ve been to this place
With you.
Long ago, we laughed and played together,
Told stories of this place.
Of the people who once lived here,
The ghosts this place held and still may confine.
At my side, a presence can be felt
She once sought something,
Much as I seek you.
But tragedies happen, catastrophes occur,
And the quest’s barely beaten path
Suddenly vanishes.
And so I wonder
If history, as they say
Will repeat itself.

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Post  JGH27 on Thu Oct 27, 2011 9:57 pm

That is really great, thanks for sharing Smile

Found this last night, love it


Thieves of Dreams

By

Jake "The Snake" Roberts

What do they steal?
Why do they steal?
Haven't they their own?

Where?

Everywhere some child or innocent one has left them unprotected
Not of ignorance or shallow thinking
They aren't hidden due to love
Hope and a sincere belief in all men
There would be no need to bury them in dark, cold holes
Where no life could possibly spring from their loved thoughts
Wouldn't ever feel a need to lock them away either

What does a thief gain?
Unfortunately even the most ignorant
Vile and irresponsible idiot can gain from dreamers

How?

By aligning or shadowing those innocent, child-like, free and naive
That have proved to be gifted in any area
Stealth like and patiently they wait for an idea
Or gift they have no right to claim
Consuming and copying whatever has been offered up by those still free enough
Inside to dream

When?

Every moment, every second day in and day out
Throughout mankind it will never end for those selected few who have been chosen
Or bestowed the honor

It is a fantastic and horrid breath that utters hope
That this love should be shared
Not raped or stolen?

My wish is not to punish the thieves
But simply be given a chance to dream or not

When I die, I feel it won't be from another's sword
But by the unstoppable heartbeat of dreams

My own?

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